TEXTUAL CONCERNS
- Purpose: The purpose of your newsletter is clearly highlighted as a separate header within your text, which I think is a great way to introduce your topic to your audience. I like the introductory issue that you have opening the newsletter because it’s relatable to most college students who are struggling with loans and debt (the purpose of your newsletter). Debt is a common and difficult topic today with college, so I think you have a great newsletter purpose that you are constructing.
- Audience: The audience can really be geared toward anyone who is in college, who is thinking of attending college, who has attended college, or parents who have kids in college (but specifically those who attend WVU) I think it reaches out to a wide-rage audience, which is a great target because you can really help out people who are not comfortable with or don’t understand the complexities of finances when it comes to college loans. Personally, I like the story and the interview from McCracken inside your newsletter. They connect the WVU reader to McCracken’s perspective because he’s an alumnus.
- Arrangement: I like the layout of your newsletter, it’s not overwhelming or cluttered with text or pictures. The navigation bar on the right is easy to read and readers can jump through the text for specific articles about areas of interest if they wanted to because they are labeled accordingly. I like how the quotes have who McCracken’s name in the text box itself instead of just being pulled out. I noticed the 3rd page isn’t completed but I suggested spacing the pictures on the right-hand side around once you get them into place (and same for the 4th page) because they look a little cramped.
- Sections: Your sections are clearly defined throughout the newsletter and are, for the most part, filled out. The sections that aren’t, I can assume what will be included under the headline. You seem to have a grasp about what you want in your newsletter from your draft/outlines. The one issue I would like to read about are the “scams” because there are so many out there, so I personally would be interested in seeing what you put in your newsletter.
- Ethos:I would say that you are a person of good character and good sense in your newsletter. You portray good sense because you show that you have a lot of knowledge about this topic throughout your newsletter and your support it with credible sources. You are a person of good character because you want to “warn” people about the possibilities of college debt and to avoid it or at least decrease the amount that you will encounter.
DOCUMENT DESIGN
- The readability of your newsletter was good. Again, it’s not cluttered and easy to navigate. The headings are easy to identify, but just my controlling, o.c.d-self…I would change the hyphens in the headers and maybe throughout the text to the read as one sentence and doesn’t break (page 5) just shrink the pictures down a bit, but that’s just a suggestion :)
- Love the colors! Tie in with WVU (and my HS)
- Font is great.
- Visuals are good; they help tie in the articles that you are talking about. Like I said earlier, may want to double check spacing and size for the header but it’s your preference.
- N/A
- The only thing that differs is the one yellow line between your last two articles on the last page…other than that, everything is great and consistent. Oh, and the page numbers, on some pages you have it label double and some times it’s once (it’s a pain, that would automatically format for me sometimes too) You have a really good newsletter.
- Contrast is good…everything is different size and different fonts between the headers and the body of the text.
- Proximity is good.
OVERALL ASSESSMENT
- I really enjoyed reviewing your newsletter because it hit close to home for me. You are providing great articles throughout your newsletter and I am really waiting to see what you going to write about in the scams section because people will do anything to make a quick buck! The layout of your newsletter is great, it’s easy to navigate through and you provide some great insight to what is a difficult topic, so I think it will turn out to be a great finished newsletter, once finished.
- I would go through a revise the page numbers to see which layout you like best. Also, I saw a few typos (nothing big) in the first article so just go through and edit. Other than that, complete your unfinished articles and you’ll be set! It looks great.
